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Monday, October 14, 2013

Reason for no cell phone usage while driving.

We are living in a world where technology is being called a distraction in cars but it can save many lives today. On October 1, 2013 a law was promoted to a primary offense instead of a secondary one, on the banning of usage of all device capable of texting and the usage of a cell phone while driving for all driver's.
                                                 
This law has become widely known for all driver's that if police see anyone driving using any hand held cell phone while the vehicle is in motion, they will be fined depending on if it is a first offense. The first offense cost 75 dollars and later offenses will be fined depending on the number of offenses beforehand.. It is important that people take this law seriously because of the consequences this action could bring. We want our roads to be safe for everyone. instead of having accidents leading to death caused someone reading or sending a text while driving. Cell phones cause people to become distracted by taking there main focus off the road ahead of them. KSL news broadcast an accident in Utah involving a driver hitting three girls because he was distracted by texting, this just shows that these accident are happening more often than they should and the end results could be life changing for the victims and driver . As the news caster makes a valid point in " 3 Children Hit by Texting Driver," "We do story after story on situations like this but it seems like it doesn't effect anyone until something like this happens to them," which is unfortunate to think we can avoid disasters before they happen if only we take the initiative too. I suggest we start thinking of going towards cars built with safety features such as front and rear view camera's, sensors that send a warning signal to tell when your going to hit a car, automatic brake systems, and Youth keys for novice driver's. These technologies are out there but no one thinks to buy them because of the expense, but we should all considered that you can not put a price on you and other people's life. We are living in a new age where cars are bumper to bumper on the highway going 55-70mph, giving people less time to apply brakes to prevent an accident from a happening. To be safe on the road we have to make sacrifices that will help us in the future.

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Reference:
     "3 Children Hit by Texting Driver." Host Alex Cabrero. KSL. 19 Sept. 2013. Web. 14 Oct. 2013. <http://www.ksl.com/?nid=148&sid=25179167>.

6 comments:

  1. 1. Topic sentence: I'm not entirely sure what your topic sentence is. Please elaborate.
    2. Support: The support was fairly strong.
    3. Transitions: Transitions were fairly skillful and allowed the writing to flow.
    4. Quote (in "quote sandwich" format with proper MLA citation): No quote sandwich was present.
    5. Grammar and spelling: I thought your grammar and spelling was accurate/
    6. Write one COMPLIMENT: I really like the idea of this blog assignement.
    7. Write at least one SUGGESTION for improvement: Be more concise with your topic and what it is specifically.

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  2. Topic sentence: The topic sentence is ok. Needs to be more elaborate just a little.

    Support: I like the support. Its very strong and well organized.

    Transitions: the transitions are very precise and nicely presented.

    Quote: No Quote Sandwich

    Grammar and Spelling: Great job with grammar and spelling

    Complement: Very nice argument and very nice examples

    Suggestions: Just make your topic sentence a little more better

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  3. 1. Your topic sentence was informative.
    2. Your support was logical and made sense to me.
    3. Everything fir together very well so your transitions were effective.
    4. No quotes.
    5. Check in the section when you are talking about the fines. “will be a fine depending…”
    6. I felt your argument was strong and that no one could argue against it.
    7. I like the basic, factual logic you used. It just made sense.
    8. I would just add more statistics to really show the dangerousness of texting and driving.

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  4. 1.Not clear with the topic sentence,it does not really summarize the paragraph
    2.Fairly strong support
    3 Great transition
    4Needs quotes
    5.Needs more statistics for support
    6.i like your argument and strong support

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  5. 1. Topic sentence – Having a fact as a topic sentence was a great idea, it really grabs the reader’s attention.
    2. Support – There isn’t much support the topic more opinion rather than facts.
    3. Transitions – are nice and short to the point, clearly supports the coming up sentence.
    4. Quote – There was no quote sandwich
    5. Grammar and spelling – I didn’t see any errors of spelling or grammar but I would say to add more vocabulary
    6. Strong argument –It is a very solid topic and there isn’t much that can go against it. Good to raise awareness on.
    7. Compliant – I think you choose one of the best topics; it is a very serious issue and relates to everyone.
    8. Suggestion- I would definitely say to add more detail to why we have this new law and any experience that you had with texting and diving.

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  6. Topic sentence- Using a dated event stands out.
    Support- Most of the paper was on opinion or looks like it was derived on opinion.
    Transitions- There is an easy flow from sentence to sentence.
    Grammar/ spelling- either have a comma before instead or capitalize the "I"
    Argument- despite the lack of support the argument that is made.
    Compliant/ improvement- The only thing that needs improvement is more support but everything else looks okay and I liked the use of pictures to create visual.

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